Overall very good, very hot, but of course there are early-release rough edges. Love how unrepentantly raunchy the MC is!
fabric prison
Good phrase but sadly overused. Something else would be better here.
The first-stuffing belly is too soft. Girl ain’t fat yet! Show us that tight hard round stuffing-only belly while the plot allows!
First-weighing ass is peak. That is all.
You can tell the game expects you to test the belly potion first because it intros how the potions are temporary but all other potions don’t. Put that info on whichever the player tries first, or else make them try belly first.
As other mentioned, double weight stage up bug, yada yada.
After the intro, the boyfriend just sorta never appears again. I think the game is better with him around.
During a sex scene: Mark began … ass meat.
His hands … jiggly cheeks. You punctuated that like it was two sentences, but the second is really just a clause of the first. Either replace the full stop will a comma, or use knead and massage to make the second sentence stand on its own.
Later in the same scene, werid->weird.
Shortstack potion scene: preditory->predatory.
In a dream triggered by the shop owner: Her “uniform” … as … as … Don’t double up “as” phrases like that. Make the second as an “and” and you’re good. Alternately, instead of using those "as"s to say these things all happen at the same time, say something about which caused which and how, or what order they happened in, or give one of the three clauses its own sentence after the other two. Or delete one or two of them for being redundant.
During the abduction dream: it’s bottom → its bottom
It might be worth pointing out to the player that energy and refills go up and down, but lust isn’t spent on anything - different kind of stat.
Maybe Certainly I’m ruining my own fun here, but it’s too easy to blitz the computer scenes at first or leave them to the end. Try and find some way to gently nudge the player towards a more even pace. Maybe have GF think out loud of being bored of them, or curious about them, depending?
Once again, very very good, especially for a first release. Of course I’m eager to see higher weight stages and more content in general, and I think you’re leaving a lot on the table by not involving the boyfriend more. I think that the GF should learn to love WG from him, rather than the shopkeeper tbh.
