Hi, I’ve made a TWINE game, and as a female protagonist the player needs to navigate through their last academic year of a University !, If you like the game a lot you can consider supporting me on patreon, where you will have access to the newest build earlier! and I also have a DeviantArt account Please give some feedback! and I will soon reply!
This Update includes: bugfixes, tweaks, 4 new description in the kitchen, 1 new description when baking, 1 new scene when using the phone, 1 new scene when out with Maia, 1 new description at netball, incorporated 3 new scenes for exam consequences.
and here is a small extract from the game:
“After finding a few pieces that you both love, you head to the food court for a break.
Maia looks around the food court and you suggest to her to get herself an icecream which on the way back to the bus she managed to lick away.”
I’m really glad to see you are trying to make a game, I love your style and can’t wait to see your art in the game. I’ve been playing it for a while and it seems quite nice for a first try, no bugs at all and the writing is fairly good. I just hope you the best!!!
Currently at the tail end of Week 2 and I must say that I like what you’ve got so far. There are a bunch of glitches (going to the gym, for instance) and a a lot to be desired in the grammar side of things, but the game at its core is very solid. I can’t wait to see how it develops.
Also, if you need any help with anything, feel free to shoot a message my way and I’ll see what I can do.
Looks pretty good so far. Other than the aforementioned gym bug the only other ones I saw were the dates for Bonnie and Maia disappearing past the 2nd weight stage (could select them but no locations available so it was a dead end) and the description for the player’s belly when going to sleep on a full stomach was partially missing.
I’m glad I’m getting a good reviews and tips to improve the game and ill be fixing those bugs ! , I agree with the font being difficult to read as its supposed to be completely different.
I really hope you’ll soon add more weight description 'cause at the point where i am, apparently the descriptions go back to the beggining, and just before that a little pounds lighter, it says that your mobility is getting difficult and i really want to see more descriptions about getting up of the bed, couch, maybe getting tired just to go to the kitchen, getting out with your roomates, issues attending to lessons, getting dressed, entering food comas, breaking the bathroom scales, having problems getting through the doors, concern your roomates, breaking furniture, etc i really love your game and hoping to have more of it in the future.
thanks for the tip, and the suggestions made for a greater variety of descriptions at different weight stages sounds great although I’m not so sure about problems through the door at this stage!
the problems with the doors may come at bigger stages, like when the character weights around 400 - 600, of course you can reach it right now but nothing changes
For me the issue is variety and limited goals to work towards. It’s an amazing start to a game, but you end up just doing the same things again and again with limited variation eventually. More than that, I feel like there’s only one goal, which means it’s less interesting. Like if we could make others gain and that’d feed into the MC’s gain, or if other feeders would change and evolve as we interacted with them more that’d really take the game up a level
Please give some feedback! and I will soon reply!
! , I agree with the font being difficult to read as its supposed to be completely different.