In light of the Christmas season (and having missed Fat Fortnight), I’ve decided to make a Christmas-themed CYOA game in Twine. The link to the very early, very unfinished story is in the link below.
I actually wrote the first draft of this story on my phone while traveling for Thanksgiving, so I’m sure there’s a lot of room for polish. Right now, I’ve only made progress on one of the three possible character paths, and that one is far from finished. Between my full-time job, my addiction to Warframe, and the probably decision to write the entire thing in rhyme, I don’t recommend expecting frequent updates.
Even so, please let me know what you think of it so far. Also, I’ve never used a file-sharing site like this before, so please let me know if there are any issues downloading the game.
Got it to work, i think there is something that windows is reading as a threat. Edge automatically disallowed, while explorer allowed the option to override
Here’s what the first two stanzas in the disclaimer should look like:
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To all those who seek the story within,
Please heed this warning before you begin.
The tale that follows is quite the naughty one,
'Tis one that juvenile eyes ought to shun.
You’ll find people partaking in acts most lewd,
Baseness, depravity, bodies in the nude.
If such base acts do not your interest perish,
Then know, too, this tale shows many a strange fetish.
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When I test the game directly in Twine, it displays correctly. However, the line breaks are absent when I run the published file. Am I the only one having this issue?
Just to provide a status update, progress on this story is going to be very slow. I was in the middle of a burst of creativity when I first wrote it. In practice, writing an entire story in rhyme turns every couple of lines into an absolute ordeal. Between making sure the lines are rhythmically sound, maintaining a solid narrative, and packing in enough descriptions to serve as fetish material, this whole thing turned out way harder to write than I anticipated.
To that end, I’m thinking that a good course of action may be to divide up the optional fetish routes between the three different character paths. Instead of each character having routes for every optional fetish, it may be better to have certain fetishes limited to one or two characters. This begs the question, who should get which fetishes? The optional fetishes that I had in mind are listed below:
Breast/butt expansion
Lactation
Inflation (milk and/or cum)
Gender transformation (male to female, futanari)
Group sex
Bestiality (with reindeer)
Which fetishes do you all want to see Ava, Kaylin, or Rolim subjected to? I’m also open to suggestions about leaving some fetishes out entirely if there’s not enough interest in them.
I’m sorry if this disappoints anyone, but I will definitely not finish this game in time for Christmas. However, that doesn’t mean that I’m abandoning it. You’ll just have to wait until sometime next year. I’ll update the OP link with new versions as I make progress, but I have no idea how often that will be.
If you don’t mind me getting a bit sappy, it’s kind of incredible how much interest this project has gotten. This is the first time I’ve ever made or posted something like this, and somehow it’s already gotten over 1000 clicks. In other words, this humble little personal project has garnered interest from no less than one thousand people. That number might be peanuts to other participants on this site, but it’s incredible to a newbie like me.
I had a few teachers in middle school and high school compliment my writing, but I never thought I was actually that good. So, please tell me, is this barely-started, fetish-fueled CYOA of mine actually well-written? Did anyone who clicked on the link in hopes of a good story just find a god-awful mess? Or is it just mediocre enough to be considered passable? Please be honest; you don’t owe me the courtesy of insincere praise.
Even if The Gain Before Christmas really is terrible, I still owe it to myself and any hopeful readers to at least finish it. I still have other ideas that I’d like to turn into writing someday. If I can’t finish this one story, how can I be confident that I’ll finish others? Regardless, I still want to say, thank you for your viewership and patience.
I don’t know man, it seems alright to me. I don’t write fetishy stuff but I can relate to the self-doubt. I think you’re pretty good. Keep it up. You’ll feel better for finishing it no matter how long it takes.
I’m sorry for the lack of updates. I know that I said I intended to finish this project, but despite that, I have to admit that I haven’t made any progress at all since then. I still think about working on it from time to time, but every time I do, I hesitate upon remembering what a struggle it was to write the entire thing in rhyme. At this point, I can no longer promise that this game will ever truly be finished. That said, I haven’t abandoned all interest in it. At this point, there’s only one thing I can think of to give this game a chance of ever being finished, and that is what I’d like everyone’s opinion on.
With my preamble out of the way, here’s the big question: Should I drop the rhymes? It was a fun little gimmick at first, what with this game being a parody of The Night Before Christmas, but the story has already gotten too long for it to be worthwhile. Not only is it incredibly difficult to keep writing quality rhymes without repeating old lines, I imagine that many readers grew sick of it before long.
Assuming I decide to stop rhyming, that still leaves the issue of continuing a story that started in rhyme. What do I do about that? Should I just leave what I already wrote as it is and just write the rest normally? This is the easiest thing to do on my end, but the result is a story written in rhyme until it just suddenly and awkwardly stops being in rhyme.
Alternatively, should I go back and rewrite the story without rhymes? If I do that, would it be better to rewrite the entire thing from scratch, or is it acceptable to leave the rhymes in up to a certain point (e.g. the initial choice of which elf to make Santa)?
I wound say keep what you have and just say “Bah Humbug” to the rhyming and continue writing normally. A quick aside in the narrative suggesting that it’s too much work for the narrator would do the trick and make the transition less jarring.